Need to hide again her heart
Broken whispers in the dark
She'll be unable to speak

Beautiful lines..good work...nice poem..u've conveyed your thought well thru this one...heartbreak n emotions are portrayed well thru this one..n the rhyme scheme used was also good
5/5
Good job!
xxPoojaxx

Wow iv never read such a emotional poem...anyways great great job

Wow..I really enjoyed this one. Every stanza was great!! I don't have any complaints with this one! Although it didn't really rhyme it was still amazing. I liked that you used three lines as opposed to four. 5/5

I agree - cool rhyme scheme. i like the rhythm too

Hey

I like this poem, i think it is very well written -it gets across the pain and anguish.

"She may not survive a lie"

That line gave me goosebumps. Perfect ending to the poem. (5/5)

Kelly
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I think the word 'lame' was a tad cliche but i still enjoyed the rest

4.5

thanks for the add!