by Marie May 29, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
I thought the first time i said goodbye was torture |
by Corruption
Fantastic poem you did a great job and thanks for the comment |
by Debbie
Apparently, this isn't one of your best works, considering its unnatural flow and forced lines. However, if I may suggest, perhaps applying a consistent metre or a certain syllable count (say 8, 10, or 12+ syllables) in every line will--in my humblest opinion--augment this poem to a higher degree for the most part. |
by Marc Ortiz
A great poem. flow was okay for me. just a suggestion to use more powerful words. I know you can do it because you're a good poet! keep up the good work :) |
Good pem i liked this one |
Hey, |