Hmmm the title i loved the most. it was secretive and soft. it was perfectly intruiging. well done. nice new style. your talent is shining thru.

5/5 David

I think the flow was perfect.. i had no idea this was your first free verse poem it sounded fantastic.. you expressed yourself really well and i enjoyed reading it.. definitly a 5/5

The flow was absoultly flawless, I sure didn't show that this is your first free verse poem, the word choice was simple yet effective, the emtion was strong and clear. Well penned, and beautifully written 5/5

This was truely interesting and amazing to read. I love free verse and found you to pull it off amazingly. Your word choice held great depth strong emotions and power. You honestly portrayed the emotion of sadness throughout this beautifully. The flow was perfect for this free verse and I would never of picked this was your first at all. Definitly this deserves a 5/5 in my eyes. Well done loved it alot. This is also why you are on my favs =) ~mel

You're killing me;
Softly,
Slowly,
Silently.
Shattering my heart
Into a million tiny pieces.

Wow awesome write. Perfect flow amazing really catching. I loved it from my heart 5/5. U r so beautiful in the pic

I liked how you didn't be hard on yourself to make it rhyme and that was the best solution in my opinion..I liked the wording and the topic
And I want to help you with a point..but it's just a suggestion

Everything and:Everything with

And generally breaks the look when it ocmes to end of a line..But it is just an idea

Other than that
It was awesome
Keep it up,
Laura

I understand what it's like to love somebody so much that it hurts you to be away from them, yet they hurt you so much it's hard to be around them. Another fantastic poem and I did enjoy the free verse style in this one, excellent vocab and imagery. 5/5 GG23

That was really nicely done...i like ur style with free fall of verses...
5/5

God bless u