Well, to me it seemed like you went overboard using the word mommy. But other than that I thought it was an alright poem. Maybe you can take mommy off of a couple of lines. I dont know. Keep it up!

Its good and sad keep up the good work

That one was great =) I really loved it and you did a great job writing it =) Another 5 =D
Rhea

Ah, this one was rather sad love :(
it was quite dreadful. poor child really.
unlike the first person to comment, i think that the repetition of mommy was fine.
it kept my eyes on the fact that this was from a child to a mom. 5/5 love.

This is great.....reuseing the word mommy gave it that extra brust of sadness....10/10 i know the rateing scal isn't 10/10 but i give you a 10 dang it

This was definately one of the best poems ive read! I love it! I got tears in my eyes no joke! for some reason death really gets to me! great job and keep it up! 5/5
~Love and Trust~

Nice poem, i think repeating mommy made it all the more real and heartfelt...very sad indeed.

The word mommy give ur poem it's true feeling. this one is a very good one. Keep up the good work.