Great poem! I think it's sweet and straight to the point. It puts into words what a lot of people feel all the time, they just don't know how to express it.

I like this. It was really cute and sweet. I kinda got confused on one line but I understood it, this is the line:

"As I watch I love you falls upon your lips,"

Maybe you can make it like this so people can understand it more, well people like me lol.

As I watch 'I love you' falls upon your lips,

If it was like that I would've gotten it right away. Anyways this is a cute poem. Good flow and good vocab. Keep it up!