That was really good, I liked it a lot. It just made me want to sit outside and see what I'm really missing.

Beautiful poem!
Very well penned...really good!
The descriptions were excellent=)
I liked the choice of words too..it was a fab read
Good job!
5/5
xxPoojaxx

Oh Little miss shorty, you are such a good lover. I like your meaning and i agree that everyone can relate to it. I can. okay much love ~stacy~

Wonderful work! As I read through it I kept changing what I thought it meant. The line "Her broken smile no longer shines" made me think it meant that something about the butterfly upset the princess. I'm not sure exactly what it was, towards the end I was using the title to determine that the princess is guilty of something, and she's jealous of the butterfly for being innocent and carefree. I also got out of it how it says she's the best actor in the world, as she was crying. I think this meant she was a depressed person, but she faked joy.

Overall, great poem. Very deep, very thoughtful. Your vocabulary throughout the poem remained strong, and it flows right off the toung! Keep up the excellent work! 5/5

I guess i'll take a shot at dissecting your poem. lets just hope i dont fly to far off the mark. firstly i feel that the butterfly stands for the innocence of childhood. your first 2 stanzas support this. the 3rd stanza introduces the dryad princess. who has grown up and had that innocence taking from her. the 4th stanza is her reflecting with sadness upon the happiness when she was younger the rest of the poem seems to be her realizing that seeming perfection she attained is worthless as she had to sell who she really is to attain it.

Hmm...
this is a hard one, but i will try my best and tell you what i think of in each phrase.::::

1: just hearing or seeing the word butterfly, i think of freedom, but also the rest of it makes me think of how fragile and beautiful freedom is. and how captivating it can be.

2: i think this is almost more of the 1st part, just about how gentle and beautiful life is and it's wonders.

3: having the dryad princess watching the innocence fly by is really an interesting way to do your poem, but it is really beautiful in a sad way, it makes me think of a dream that doesn't come true, or a hope that does not come fullfilled. (sorry, this is a bit hard for me)

4: by just using the word porcelain to describe your princess, i already think of kind of a cold perfection, the crystal tears just adding to that image. and also you can feel the pain of not wanting to let go of memories.

5: the word 'mask' is very commonly used in sad poems, it really is good for describing deppresion and wanting to be perfect, yet it is sad how only when she is alone she can spill her feelings

6: your poem really shows how freedom, and perfection, perfect opposites, are so fragile. the slightest push and it cracks, to reveal something new. but it really relates to many people about how they can only show their inner feelings to the 'empty silence'
your poem is really beautiful, just to tell you.

7:this is an example of the many people who just watch people struggling with their pain. your use of the word carelessly really finished that image, as if there really wasn't a point in viewing the pain of others except for amusement

8: this makes me feel as if the princess has finally realized that even the beauty of perfection cannot contribute to the colors of the world. and for that reason she is starting to break.

9: this is kindof the same thing i said for 8, the princess cannot share her weakness of this realization, and so has nothing to do except collapse from the weight.

9: (the last one) this is perfect for the ending of the poem, the princess does not have the strength to release her pain, and so therefore has nothing to do but encase it again, in her jewel. and also, the butterfly flying away as the last line completes it, for it is again how careless people are. just walking away from reality into their dreams.

okay, wow. that took awhile, but i hope that is in depth enough for you... i really loved this poem by the way, it really does make people think.
5/5
gabriella

I thought this was BEAUTIFUL. its really creative and the imagery is wonderful! i really enjoyed it =]
Geo

Darn.
This poem could've been perfect.
I LOVED your deep meaning in it.
It's just that it didn't flow that well. :[

What I thought with this was that
I'm kind of this way myself.
But..

She doesn't trust the people around her
Her family, her friends, blah.

But then, of course, a person NEEDS to trust someone.
In my case, I trust strangers.
But this princess, I guess she was just... tired of it all.
She needed a light in a dark world.

This butterfly comes in
With it's colorful wings
She just wanted to trust it.

How sad for her that she couldn't find anyone
Other than a butterfly to see her true self.

Darling, this poem...
Shiznit.
It deserves a five.

But the flow...

Eck.
Forget it.
I enjoyed this poem.
It truly DOES deserve a five :P

Omg this poem is amazing. such beautiful flow of words and the symbolism of the butterfly is amazing

5/5 =)

comment some fo my poems as well =)

Gret job.I love it so much.The imagery was just so good.

This is a really good poem
its really cute and it makes me feel like... peaceful if that is possible? haha
but anyways its really good i like the idea of it too... : )
keep it up youre pretty talented
<3jess

Wow, that was so well setailed and beautiful imagery was created within those lines. i loved the poem for its detail!
keep it up
nuf luv xx

Such emotion!!!
i loved it sweetheart :D

Danielle, no wonder that this is rated so high and it has this many comments! It was great! I loved the images I got from this one. I almost cried with the Dryad Princess.. ='( Very good job love!

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xYour Wifeyx

Oh my this was amazing! I almost cried when i read it and i think that anyone really can relate!!! It also can draw a picture in your mind of what is happening!

5/5

Danielle

I really love your choice of words, the poem is really beautiful. I think it have all the poetic essence in it, well done.

I have a suggestion. Try to use simile or metaphors.

PS. This is just a suggestion =)

TC! Thanks again Danielle.. I really appreciate it. ^_^

I haven't read anything since "Drowning" and I must say....this was absolutely stunning. Each and every word was a piece to a puzzle of beautiful images, fitting perfectly into their place.
Strong, passionate, and beautiful. Well done.

Excellent!

it was very descriptive, the flow and words are great! so majestic i might say!

keep it up!