Short and meaningful. well done. yeah i thought that veiled could have either 1 or 2. depends on how you say it.

5/5 David

Powerful, really amazing.
Unique writing. 5/5

Short and sweet. Truely powerful. You are very good with words and know how to portrayed them with such deep and powerful emotion. Another unique poem you have here which you have added an amazing touch too. I truely loved reading this piece which you have perfectly penned. Well done~mel