The flow was great, the word choice was awesome, the vocab excellent, The rhymes were outstanding unforced, the emotion was strong, and the message was clear. You did a great job on this poem, try reading the poem out loud to spot place where the flow is rocky, it becaomes more apparent when you havent read the poem in a day or so, But other than that excellent job 5/5

Awww....so touching. Each piece of yours is so good, and though my comments may sound repetitive, I find it necessary to share them. I hate to think of how many comments I missed because people failed to take the time and share their appreciation, or their critiques. So I am sharing mine. Great job! Good conclusion!
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