Sometimes hard and dark
Other times soft and light
But most the time in between.
^^I like this stanza..great way to end this peice..n it's 3 powerful lines put togther to make it look beautiful..
Other than that...the rest of the work was god...but not your best anyways..
Good job..5/5

xxPoojaxx

Everytime I think of him
My tears fall like the rain
Outside my window.

realy relates to my life. it was such a nice work.. you have great talent. i often read your poems .. my dear. i loved your poems and i wana add you in my favourites 5/5

B graceful dear. Dont be depressed as you have expressed in your 5/5 worth poem. tc

"Sometimes hard and dark
Other times soft and light
But most the time in between."

I adored that tercet for being quite provocative. It actually is difficult if one stays in between, because you will only end up getting hurt by yourself and others. (I've learned that the other day, I suppose. Heh.)

Furthermore, I liked its set-up and diction. Methought that it was meant to be craggy, regardless of the author's writer's block, so to better portray one's feelings and emotions of depression. It was quite effective at least to me. =] A poignant write, m'dear. Thank you for sharing. All the best and take care, Marian.

I am not trying to be cruel, i am just being honest, i didnt like this one.
It didnt flow at all, each line seemed so forced, and there was no emotion. but you do have talent as i have seen in your other work.
love Tara-Kay

Well I'm not a critic or something, but for me, you are having trouble with your punctuations. You should learn abit more about when to use punctuations as for commas. Well I'm gonna give you 4/5 anyways..

I really like your poem.
this is excaly how i felt,
and it just made me feel very like,
i dont know, understanding to know
that im not the only one who has thought of that. i cant relly explain it.
but i really like this poem.

I liked this poem...
Its soemthing almost everyone goes through..
Hold On..It will get better...
Anyway...
Very good job putting it into words...

5/5