Lol...nice work...the last line was kool.. |
by Fluffy
This was definitely VERY different. And I believe it's the first funny poem I have read here. And funnily enough, I like it. It's poetic in its own strange way :). To improve, you should put speech marks around the "who am I" in the third stanza. Also, you should take out the 'as' in the third line in the third stanza. |
by isabel
Okay... |
Pretty neat. 5/5 |
by Goran Rahim
Hahaha, this was a great one, but if you read it carefully it is more sad than funny, but you have done a great job. keep it up like always. |
by MaSkEdSoUl
I actually totally agree with Elysium. It was funny AND poetic. First funny poem I've liked. Oh and licence should be license :) Keep writing! Never heard of the movie....I'll look for it lol. Anyways, keep it up! |
by claire
I think this was sad (beneath the funny) too. its a great poem. |
by Brittany C
Great poem. It was funnie and different. Keep up the great work. 5/5 |
by .K.i.T.t.Y.
Hmm....idk i really didnt take it as something sad or little kidish. i took it deeper. like a person whos been numbed of their past, and lost in the present, and frightened of the future. |
I thought this was good. maybe you fooled us.. its supposed to be deeper.. lol anyway great write.. 5/5 |
by Live WeLL
Haha.. good stuff..pretty funny.. i loved the end.. nice job =] |
by Vanessa
Lmao *rolling on the floor laughing* |
by dejanae
You need to put more heart into it sweetiie |
by Izi
Ha ha ha tat made me laugh....lol, tat was stupid!! |
by Tara
Lol, cute poem....lol a bit on the confusing side but enjoyable and filled with laughs |
Great poem ,good flow and wording was great, great job , p.s thanks for the comment to bad it was true, thank your friend Tracy 5/5 |
by Peachy
So funny/...;p |
Ha ha ha this is unique n so hilarious. wow am stil laughin. u deserve a 5.5 |
by Cindy
Fsams |
by Jessica
Oh i love that movie! Jackie Chan's who am i!! great poem!! i couldn't stop laughing! lol |