This is a good piece n I give u 4/5. U can try an etheree n let me know when done. If you wanna know the rules read my 'lost'.

I personally really like this... i think it has a relatible meaning behind the words. What you wrote is very true!

-love whitney-

Thanks guys - if anyone else votes - specifically under a 4 - could they leave a comment to tell me how i could improve?

I am sorry, but this is not one of my favorites. I can give you a 3.5/5 but no higher. Try and get a tad more creative with your words...poetry is all about showing your emotion and beauty...show it off! Try and strengthen your word choice and you will then be doing well. I think you have major potential.

-Sabree

It was cute but once again to short i didnt really have enough time to get into the flow 4/5

Really good poem.

5/5