Another Dream

I agree with those commenting before me. this was very well written and you chose the right words and placed them perfectly. Nice work here.

Wow this poem is really good there was alot of emotion=)

This poem was excellent.i can relate to it very well.
i just love the way you have written it.the imagery was perfect and the flow was good.i espically love this stanza

Long hall
faint call
Turns away
Nothing to say
Icy stare
No where
Such grief
Sweet leaf
Stale smoke
Twisted joke
Sad grin
Pain held within

She's late
Oh great
Desperate prayer
No one there
Secret kept
She wept
Stopped him
Eyes dimmed
One time
Not mine
Slight touch
Hurt so much

i just love the way you have written this stanza.keep up the good work and hope we stay in touch
best wishes
and take care
emmeline

Wow its short and perfect trully a work of art i have it 5/5 :)

I like how you broke this up so there were only two or three words in each line, and how you managed to make it rhyme at the same time. The flow was a bit off at most parts, but I can't blame you since the rhyme and syllible sceme caused that to happen.