Wow. this was wonderful poem its self. it had great vocabular, flow, and useage of words.

as for the heart in this poem, which makes it extraordinary, it was sad. i dont know how else to put it.

this was just great. and it explained it all well. especially with images.

major 5/5. hang it there. i know it must hurt.

Oh my gosh!
I'm so sorry about your friend
and may he rest in peace
everything was fantastic
don't change a thing
wow
this was amazing

Heartwrenchingly sad, so touching, I know Adam is smiling down on you everytime somebody reads this. I am so sorry for you loss, and I do hope things get better, as time goeas on. as for the poem the flow was excellent, and the word truly beatuiful

Wow hun, that was absolutely amazing!! The flow was flawless and there was so much emotion. Well done on this.

Hope you feel better soon, he is in a better place. Xx Chrissie

That is a really sad poem. But it was a FANTASTIC poem. A great read. 5/5

Kalee

Wow!!....really touching....well penned...simple yet penned with beauty
Good work!
5/5
xxPoojaxx

Life is sad.

Wow.. that is so sad.. you had tears in my eyes.. I thought this was really good. It flowed and most of it rhymed. i think im going to give it a 5/5.

I loved the poem itself i give it a 5/5 but jsut an opinion but i dont really do this either in most of my poems o.o is you should spread your lines a bit more.. i mean dont have them in like pragraghs o.o makes the reader know more of how you were trying to think it.. anyways im not a pro and my poems arent that great so its not a big deal if you listen to me or not anyways like i said it was a really good poem = ]

Your flow was amazing.. Vocabulary great, and such deep emotions flowed from this peice.
I thought it was and excellent read.
Well done,
Elaine

Wow superb dear i loved this poem. Wow again its awsome really 5/5

Awesome poem.
and if he's looking down on you now, he'll prob only have good memories of the two of you.
great job 5/5

A captivating read... Amazing flow of words and great description.. I enjoy reading every bit of this poem.. The atmosphere described is so intense and detailed...

Beautifully written...

Very well done. This was a very powerful poem. Your choice of words were really well done, and the emotion was very strong.
5/5

That was great
you portrayed a story that i could envision in my mind
it was great
hope u r coping well with the loss of ur friend
poetrys a good way to help
great work 5/5
xx
shell

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I loved your poem is sad though 5/5

Awesome ..... very sad n very well written.... appreciate the way u hv described ur feelings and d scenario.... very impressive...