"a year has passed i really miss his noise"

'Noise' seemed like a really odd word choice there. But I suppose for the sake of the rhyming and the flow you can't really change it.

Other than that, great job. It was a smooth poem, easy to understand.

Even i found use of word 'noice'a bit odd.. but itsa really nice poem.. simple and beautifully written.keep it up

Bhawna

Good job!!! keep it up
~danielle~

WOW....thats a very beautiful poem...loved every written line...keep up the good work...5/5..your friend....*Melody*:)

That was bee-he-u-tifull ..love it...

5/5

~Wake~

A very nice poem with a good style and powerful meaning..Am just wondering if you are native speaker or not?

This is amazing.
i cant get over it.
every word has a meaning.
thats so powerfull.
like "noise" its perfect.
its an odd word that i didnt get why it was there at first.
but then i got it.
then poem is so ourstanding it is making me like i dont even have words for how amazing this poem is.

keep up the good work.
you are such a talented poet.
<3jess

Awww the second stanza really caught my attention, It really showed what love can do...and how love can make you do things such as wait for the one you love to return home back to you. Amazing poem keep up the great work xxx Roxy xxxx

It really caught my attention.
so true so deep.
great job.

U seem lyk a very gifted individual!
Welldone,

This poem does well for the thinker. easy to follow, yet your choice of words makes the reader dive deep into their own mind, as well as yours.......

excellent my friend.

salwa

This is a realy good poem i like it

Very captivating piece, greatly written and very unique, filled with emotions. You have great descriptions and imagery through the whole piece, very vivid and powerful. The repetition of the lines -deep in the dark far from the sun
sitting alone and waiting for someone-
is so effective it adds a lot to the great rhythm and the flow of this piece.
Wording and rhymes are also very good.
Keep writing!
5/5 from me

My sweet friend Adel,

This poem I had not read before..it is your best poem I think.
This must be about the person we talked about b4.. I truly hope and pray he will return to your life. You are such a loving and caring young man. I know that your love will overcome all obstacles in life and if you two have the courage to be friends it will be well worth it, am I right or am I right hehe???

Your caring sister Ingridxx 5/5 as always

Hi

it's a touching poem

full of emotions full of longing

i hope you hear soon from that one

keep it up

good luck
Her Guardian

Great jobb E>

A comment for this poem is simple;
PERFECTLY AMAZING.
YOU ARE AMAZING.
consider yourself added to my fav authors, every poem i read of yours gets better and never dissapoints! :]
keep it up
xx
Taegan Emily

Deep in the dark far from the sun
sitting alone and waiting for someone
a year has passed i haven't heard his voice
a year has passed i really miss his noise
under the heavy rain i am walking alone
shouting for his name; he may return home
the winter left and the burning summer came
i am still standing and shouting for his name
dust on my eyes i am almost blind
a twister came by but he never left my mind

omg .. this is sooo emotional... well done

I love this poem! thank you for commenting on my poem. Returning the favor! =)
Thanks
ian

This is really good. You should publish some of your work. I also may sugest a site called fictionpress.com yor work on that site would be so very adord as well. Keep writing.

XxXKristie MarieXxX