Storms of my life

by ImNotPerfect20   Jun 1, 2007


The hammering on my window is caused by the rain.
Why does this storm have to be so thunderous?
It's louder then the thumping of my heart,
Louder than the tears that plummet from my eyes.

He broke my heart into a million pieces,
Just because he wanted someone else.
He told me he loved me and I believed him,
But he left me and went after her.

I want to caution her, but she probably won't listen,
Because I am his ex girlfriend and she won't talk to me.
Everytime I see her she reminds me of myself,
Because I fell for his lies on more then one occasion.

It's been 4 months and I'm done crying over him.
Done with this hurt he put me through!
Over everything that he has ever said to me.
Just want to go back to a time when my heart was complete.

Please help me to stop thinking of him everyday,
And dreaming of him every night.
Because when that happens you know you can move on
Move on and not worry about crying for him anymore.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Fair work

  • 17 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    It's funny how gullible girls can be at times, I mean if he left you for her he's likely do to the same thing in the long run. Heart break is never easy, but we have to learn from our mistakes and grow with time. Amazing job and great flow once again 5/5 GG23

  • 17 years ago

    by Richard Machado

    Wow, I didn't notice how damn hateful that comment was till I re-read it. The poem wasn't as bad as all that, and it was a story. I'm just a 'lil sleepy and cranky, so just ignore that last comment.

    Good work.

    ~Richi~

  • 17 years ago

    by Richard Machado

    This poem is a - blah poem: a poem that was just to expell emotions, but it is just whining to me. You see, I fully get the emotions shown; but, that's just it, it fails to capture me: to draw me in. I was reading a diary when I read this.

    A few words. Firstly, a poem should tell a story. And, secondly, the best poems just don't blatantly ask questions, or make statements, without a clear intention. Meaning you should use as little words possible to ultimately describe: an emotion; a setting; a plot; or an ideal, the narrator is going through, to progress said story. That is just my opinion.

    I hope my pointers can help you.

    Good luck with future writes; and, have a fun time with it.

    ~Richi~

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    He word choice is excellent, and the flow was great, the imaregery is vivd, and the emtion was once again powerful, and heartfelt. All I can tell you is to stay strong, and things do eventually get better. 5/5

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