I can relate to your problem more than well, very nice transition 5/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

I really liked this poem. I know a little bit of how that feels. This poem has great word choice and a nice flow, thought it could be a little better. I gave it a 5/5.

Very good write.it's good....well written...u expressed it well.n the poem had a good floe
and words were also well chosen
Good job!
5/5
xxPoojaxx

Stay Strong, everyone deserves someone who will respect them.
As for the poem, really well written and it was full of so much emotion well done.
keep it up
5/5

Excellent piece worth 5/5. I just found mistake that's the wrong use or confused use of the word 'then'. It should b 'than'. Just have a look. This is overall a beautiful piece.

Really good!
I felt this many times,
So I can relate and it's not fun
This poem described to the reader what it's like to be in love
but then have it taken away
I loved it
5/5
kaila

Pretty good, very well written.

The first stanza was beautiful, excellent vocabulary, excellent fluency, it really drew me in. The poem sort of began to loose it's impact in the middle of it, but it caught me again at the end.

Overall, it was good! I could tell you felt deeply about this topic.
5/5

Very nice piece! i recently just got over a 6 month break up. I especially liked the lines, "Louder than the tears that plummet from my eyes. " keep up the good work and if u'd like to comment my Beyond Compare poem itd b greatly appreciated.

Beautiful piece... Excellent writing. I liked the analogies used between the actual storm and the figurative one. There was also a nice emotional transition as well.

5/5, most definitely

-tragic-

I loved this poem. It was very well written. Your a very good writer. I must read more of your poems. Keep it up. 5/5

`-jackie.

I know exactly how you feel :( god know i can relate this beautifully heart felt piece of art gets a 5/5 from me.

Aww ow..this is so sad!..i love your flow and the meaning is deep. its a moment that is in many girls lives..uve put it in good words..keep it up! nuf luv xx

That was great, but sad. Really well written. I think we've all fallen for the lies...
5/5

Ravyn

The flow could be better, but apart from that, well done. i liked this one
xxxxx

He word choice is excellent, and the flow was great, the imaregery is vivd, and the emtion was once again powerful, and heartfelt. All I can tell you is to stay strong, and things do eventually get better. 5/5

This poem is a - blah poem: a poem that was just to expell emotions, but it is just whining to me. You see, I fully get the emotions shown; but, that's just it, it fails to capture me: to draw me in. I was reading a diary when I read this.

A few words. Firstly, a poem should tell a story. And, secondly, the best poems just don't blatantly ask questions, or make statements, without a clear intention. Meaning you should use as little words possible to ultimately describe: an emotion; a setting; a plot; or an ideal, the narrator is going through, to progress said story. That is just my opinion.

I hope my pointers can help you.

Good luck with future writes; and, have a fun time with it.

~Richi~

Wow, I didn't notice how damn hateful that comment was till I re-read it. The poem wasn't as bad as all that, and it was a story. I'm just a 'lil sleepy and cranky, so just ignore that last comment.

Good work.

~Richi~

It's funny how gullible girls can be at times, I mean if he left you for her he's likely do to the same thing in the long run. Heart break is never easy, but we have to learn from our mistakes and grow with time. Amazing job and great flow once again 5/5 GG23

Fair work