by dollwithafrown Jun 1, 2007
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
A pen and some old scrap paper; |
I think the poem was very nice, maybe if you took out some of the "oh"s, it would sounds a little better though. I can feel the passion you posses for writing, and you conveyed it fairly well in this poem. Nice job! |
I really liked this, except for one line kind of threw me off... |