Comments : A Pen and Some Old Scrap Paper

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I really liked this, except for one line kind of threw me off...

    "But to me they mean oh so much,"
    ^^ I don't think the 'oh' is very necessary in it, it kind of throws it off. Other than that, this was really good.

    5.5
    :]
    <3

  • 17 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    I think the poem was very nice, maybe if you took out some of the "oh"s, it would sounds a little better though. I can feel the passion you posses for writing, and you conveyed it fairly well in this poem. Nice job!