Well written poem, but I think you should use more punctuation, it would make it easier to read and add stronger atmosphere to the poem. It's 4/5
because of that, but the whole impression that poem leaves is really good.

I wish i could put more punctuations but i dunno what's wrong with this website lately but everytime i'm psoting a poem it just turns my "i'm, isn't, aren't, etc" into "i@#%m, isn*^t, aren#$t, etc"... just couldn't leave it like that so had to write "i am, is it not, etc" which i agree makes the poem not as good.... :(((

Awww I Loved It!,, :]

This is so cute
wow. youre really good.
<3jess

Wow very nicely writen 5/5

Excellent write 5/5

Niece piece=)keep more writing poems
good luck!5/5