Well, the message conveyed, Powerful! But the way in which you delivered it lacks the proper meter and seems a little too forced. I would run back through it. Try to concentrate more on the message and less on the rhyme scheme cause an easy to read poem sends a far more powerful message than a forced rhyme poem. I did enjoy it very much though and think it has a lot of potential. Keep on writing you clearly have a knack.

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Genius,
Powerful,
And quite blunt.
I love it!

Wow!!....the message conveyed is soo powerful and the way u've penned it is also great....though the rhyme schemed a li'l forced at some places...all over..the poem was good and powerful!
Good job!
5/5
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