Pretty good.. anger and hurt fill it but work on the rhythm in the second to last stanza

Not bad with the transition of the two poems I enjoyed the amiable version somewhat more, mainly to the fact that the use of the F bomb in this poem seems to be used to often. You must know the key to a hostel environment is not the way you use profanity but the way you manipulate and distort your words into a form of antagonism.

-ctmskh

I'd almost call it a fling,
With never lasting pantomime

like that pharse.
not sure about the swearing so much.
but i'll check out the other one