Wow, is this is the poem u read on retreat right? i love it. it flows really nicely and has a great message i think everyone can relate to in some way or another. keep writing, these are amazing!

I like the emotion behind the poem. i like the third stanza the best. it starts out really good, but it starts to lose flow when you start altering the length of the stanzas. it kind of bounces back and forth. overall though, great job!

Wow, started off a lil confusing abit un organised but picked up and finished off so well!!
by ReJoyce

"He did his best
But couldn't contest
To his father
So he took his own life"

i liked that because it was relatable.
So sad and true.
Great poem so much emotion and great message well done. 5/5