I really like this its very good....

That was great. It was very trapping. Realistic. Though it was messy in a few places you did very well.

Holy crap dude!! this poem got me all tingly lol i think ima go to my girls house now haha.. very good poem i loved it. keep writing. 5/5

Wow...now that is a strong poem by all standards, i was held on to it for as long as it lasted, great work here, keep it up
thanks for the pieces of advice u give me and i will make good use of it...handsome

What a poem! Itz awesome. Wonderful writing.

As I scrolled down to write my own comment I noticed almost everyone had to say wow to this poem. It's amazing! I loved the concept. I was confused at the end when the lines began repeating but I understood after I finished reading it all. Very, very good.

Very good, a little too long i thought. But i liked your vocabulary and your lines sounded very good, keep i tup.

I love how all your poem's play out in a story.
This peice flowed amazingly, it is long, but I didn't mind reading it at all.
It was well written, but im begining to expect that with your poems;)

Very Enjoyable,
5/5 Elaine.

Excellent!

This one is truly excellent in every end, Every lines described it all, words and ideas were in a straight line. The entire concept was very beautiful. This one is most I love. Very wonderful write!

keep it on writing!
You are very talented!

Wow. i was simply mesmerized [sp] by every line. every word u chose just seems to fit it perfectly! its incredibly powerful and moving. this is definatly a perfect 5.

Whoa..this poem was sooo goood! I can really understand it! Keep it up! (: