Well... I dont believe I've been left this speechless in a while after reading a love poem...My eyes just jumped from line to line...theres nothing that should be fixed or anything...the way you wrote this just left me with a "wow!"...With a title like the one you chose there are a few different ways you can go with this, and I love the way you wrote it!....Absolutley beautiful piece of poetry!
Chelsey

Jeannie
Beautiful yet sad poem of love. So touching.

But pain is all I find these days
Each night I cry, Tears fill my eyes
A simple time, a soul betrayed
Wrapped up in the touch of lies.

This brings tears to my eyes.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy