Wow thats very powerful and very well written i like your last line and how it stands out wlel done xx

It was such a sad writieng. i loved the way you ahave expressed your feelings. i realy appriciate dear. yourwriting style. and my best wishes with you. you have put great job here.

and thats why i am giving you 5/5
take care

This poem was written well. The lines seemed to be dripping with your emotion and it allowed the reader to sample some of the pain you felt while writing this. I liked the fact that you used so much emotion in your writing. However, in some parts the rhythm faltered a little bit, normally because the syllable counts were off. Anyway, it was a great job and the message was clear and powerful. 5/5.

Wow that was so powerful and emotional...Im speechless 5/5