Roses Are Dead. {Collab}

by Natalie   Jun 2, 2007


Roses are Dead

One wish after another blows through the wind
Brushing past countless decisions ready to be made
Faith and hope have fallen beyond mountain tops
Stealing truth and happiness which surely will fade

All those dreams that meant something, disappear
Falling behind fake scenes created in desperation
Every ounce of energy wasted in hopes to survive
Tomorrow is faced with another complexed situation

Laughter fades to smiles, and smiles fade to nothing
Hanging by a small piece of string on its very last thread
Intense emotions circle around with confused thoughts
Remembering every single last word their lover had said

Fingers quickly turning numb and life is impossible to grip
Everything seems to be fading like the writings in the sand
Disturbing flashbacks of timeless tales floating in confusion
Breaking down as memories fail to appear on command

Dreaming of days from the past where nothing felt wrong
And only tears from happiness and joy would fall from eyes
Those were the times where my life made the most sense
Now these wishes wilt away like the dying of the roses.

_This was a collab between Darien and I. :] First verse was me, then him, then me, etc. Last verse. Two first lines were mine. Two last were Dariens!! :D

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  • 15 years ago

    by Sora

    Wow i am simply blown away by this poem. So touching, so well worded. Heartfelt and extremely creative. I just wanted to keep reading! this poem really touched me, wonderful talent you have, along with the other person you collaborated with on this piece. Never stop writing! 5/5.

    -Ashlei.

  • 16 years ago

    by ether

    I've always liked this.
    I'm not sure if you and Darien won or Jess and I, we'll just call it a tie.
    I miss our family damnit.
    You should submit something new, sometime, Nata.

    jess ~

  • 16 years ago

    by Frank the Great

    This was a pretty cool poem, i really enjoyed it. great job

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    It was a very good poem. My only dislike was the last stanza not rhyming like the other ones did. It was consistent throughout the poem except for that last part. The title was an attention grabber (although I don't believe and has to be capitalized but many authors do the all caps rule as well so it doesn't really matter what my preference is). The words you used along with the metaphors (not just you that other person as well) were wonderfully diverse which I look for in a poem. I don't know if this is just me or if I'm not the only one but for whatever reason, no matter how lovely the poem really was, it lost my attention. I don't know why exactly. Perhaps too many metaphors? I do believe it is a great poem and I think it was just me being distracted in a thought or something along those lines. Overall I think it is a five. Congrats. You have brought the poetry Hitler to her knees, which in turn means, if I like one poem chances are I'll like the rest. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by LittleBlackRose

    Wow, this poem is really strong..
    I think it's great that you can write a poem with two persons, because you need to understand each other really well...
    Great job!

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