Awh, wow. This was amazingg. Arghh, Jess and me will have to work hardd haha. I just loved this. THe descriptions and metaphors you used were excellent and unique. The flow was good except for the last line which was just a little bit out of flow I thoght. And the emotion oozed from every linee. Amazingg job both of youu! 5/5

Awww....wow!!...lol...excellent job!,...beautiful work...i loved the imagery used..and the choice of words was really good..Kudos to all of the 3 of you..
Well done!=)
5/5
xxPoojaxx

Mean 2 of u..lol..typo error*=D

Great write hun! I really love the realisty about it! its a double meaning poem and I love that!! great work 5/5

Aww wow that was soo good. that was really powerful. keep up the great work to the both of u!! xx

Wow, this poem is really strong..
I think it's great that you can write a poem with two persons, because you need to understand each other really well...
Great job!

It was a very good poem. My only dislike was the last stanza not rhyming like the other ones did. It was consistent throughout the poem except for that last part. The title was an attention grabber (although I don't believe and has to be capitalized but many authors do the all caps rule as well so it doesn't really matter what my preference is). The words you used along with the metaphors (not just you that other person as well) were wonderfully diverse which I look for in a poem. I don't know if this is just me or if I'm not the only one but for whatever reason, no matter how lovely the poem really was, it lost my attention. I don't know why exactly. Perhaps too many metaphors? I do believe it is a great poem and I think it was just me being distracted in a thought or something along those lines. Overall I think it is a five. Congrats. You have brought the poetry Hitler to her knees, which in turn means, if I like one poem chances are I'll like the rest. :)

This was a pretty cool poem, i really enjoyed it. great job

I've always liked this.
I'm not sure if you and Darien won or Jess and I, we'll just call it a tie.
I miss our family damnit.
You should submit something new, sometime, Nata.

jess ~

Wow i am simply blown away by this poem. So touching, so well worded. Heartfelt and extremely creative. I just wanted to keep reading! this poem really touched me, wonderful talent you have, along with the other person you collaborated with on this piece. Never stop writing! 5/5.

-Ashlei.