Very down to earth and solid. The scheme did have a hiccup in the middle, and I had to reread that section, but an overall good poem.

Good piece on the whole again, but some minor adjustments would help improve this a little:

"when he steps out of the wagon, dressed all sweet,
But our eyes, they will never meet." - this does not make sense. I think this should be changed to: "When he steps off the wagon, dressed oh so sweet, we glance at one another, but our eyes will never meet".

"Feeling your present,"- change the word 'present' to 'presance'.

Hmm. Other than that. Good write. Well done

I loved this poem! Every simple wich i liked. 5/5

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Simple and honest stuff, i really liked this one!!!
great stuff
xxx love from ali xxx
5/5