Comments : Betrayal

  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    You always write with the good rhyming, this one is not exception. You described the feelings really good, using right words on right places.
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by marilyn marti

    I really loved this poem. The way you put everything together made me feel almost as if I was feeling your pain. I'm sorry for whatever happened to you-seems the people you are talking about were really hurtful and inconsiderate. Well, hey, I just wanted to thank you sooooo.....- so so much for voting/commenting on my poems! It really means so much. ESPECIALLY since you really took your time to write comments-they were very long but very heartfelt. Now you will be listed as one of my favorites. I will be sure to read more of your works.PROMISE. Well thank you again, and really really good job on the poem 5/5.
    p.s. Youre from france!! I love french guys!! lol. besides my family is part french and i know some too! lol. AU REVOIR!

  • 17 years ago

    by Krzysztof J

    Its good has a lot of pain in it, i could easily relate and its hard. If i may be so bold as to say try spliting it into verses it would be easier to read, but i have seen a big improvement in your work :) and as always its a pleasure to read your poems, as for mine i know not my best work, but ive been 'empty' recently so i guess my poems show that :( 4/5 here :)

  • 17 years ago

    by JUSTiNA

    THiZ iZ A W0NDERFUL P0EM. i LiKED iT! 5/5 & THANKS F0R C0MMENTiNG Mi P0EM, "i NEVER REALiZED" && iiT WAS A FiCTi0N P0EM, iT DiDNT ACTUALLY HAPPEN T0 ME iN REAL LiFE. WELL KEEP 0N WRiTiNG P0EMS BECUZ U R CERTAiNLY G00D AT iT.

    --JUSTiNA--

  • 17 years ago

    by Julie

    Nice! painfully can relate too. i like your style and flow. So much pain! i could almost feel it. nice work!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Hebe

    Nice poem.
    Full deep emotions.
    You discribe the pain so well, that I could almost feel it. So sad.
    Great work.
    Take care

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica Evelyn Maxwell

    This is very amazingly written,
    very emotional and very sad.
    excellent write.