Refuge

Brothers come in handy sometimes, he must care about you alot. Anyways the poem was really powerful, heartfelt emtons, deep raw ans powerfully gripping. the word choice was excellent, and the flow was great, the only improvement I could see that could be made, it instead of using number like 5 and 6 you should try spelling them out five and six, it makes the poem look better, and it impoves the flow.

The were I think should have been where . The flow was good for the poem and all and all the whole idea was good. You could have explained the background abit better but all is good. I liked it for the most part I gave you a 4 good job Plot121

That was a good poem.
the rhyme and rhythm were great.
it was kind of simple words, but that made the emotion more real.
good work.

You write with so much emotion and yet at the same time everything else is in place. Your rhythm and rhyme is all there. It really makes your poems perfect and very strong and captivates alot of people

This poem was great! The subject was an excellent topic to write about and you really put feeling into it. I think you could have made it flow better, there where some parts where I couldn't feel a flow at all. Your wording was simple, but I think that kind of added to the poem, a bit. This is supposed to be in the eyes of a simple girl, so the word choice seems to fit. Overall, it was a good poem. 4/5