by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex Jun 2, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
This is about giving yourself up to something you don't want, thinking it's what you deserve. |
by Synh
Not your best. I liked the idea behind it but I thought the flow was kind of off and it didn't seem to have as much heart and soul in it as your other poems do. |
by jason
Ehh sorry i can not say this is one of your best poems... well in my opinion at least other people probably enjoy it more then me.. but i still enjoyed it non the less so i give it a 4/5 |
First off, I loved the story line behind your words...it was very creative and something you don't see a lot of readers explore into these days, lol. The imagery was good and so was the flow, all in all this was a really good poem; not that I should expect any different from you. |
by claire
This is an amazing poem - dark, but so enchanting! it sounded a bit like prose it parts, but it was almost too intense to be, plus the flow was so perfect. the repetition of some words and phrases really added to the effect, but sometimes I wasn't exactly sure I knew what you meant - like, how can you press a scissors into your kidney? wouldn't you die? I wouldn't actually know, thats just what I think. Regardless of any critique, this was an absolutely amazing poem! |
by Kristina
Wow this is a very dark poem. very different then what i'm use to reading, so i have to give you props for that. it was kind of... weird tho and strange, which is good i guess cause it's something you dont see a lot. so keep on writing like this 5/5 |