Bye, Bye, Birdie.

A very intresting concept of a poem i must say. Rather enjoyable. You took the idea of the popular nursrey rhyme blah blah black sheep and kindof twisted it. Now the first thing you notcie about the title of the poem is that its an alliteration. The way youve written it also makes it seem rather for little kids, so its a little appealing to our...er... inner child. I mean i can imagine a young gir/boy saying "bye bye birdy" just before the birds fly off. It also creates that image - a sense that soemthing is leaving. You repesete the title in every stanza, impowering this image youve already created. Then working on the next line of the nurrsey rhyme, you ask if they have any feelings left. All joyous feelings and emotions in most stanza's, and then again working on the nursrey rhyme, you say no/yes repating it twice. It also shows a varyed of people you are saying it to. And most of it is quite heartwarming, the rpeition in this read works really well. The last and final stanza youve done something clearly new. Youve changed it to say its na no. You havnt got tears left. Enjoyable read. H a good flow and works really well. Keep writing! xx