Can't think of a title for this sad story

by Riz   Jun 3, 2007


Did I do something bad?
What is this place?
Why are all the children crying?
Why are people avoiding my face?

Where's mommy, sis?
Where's daddy going?
Did we do something wrong?
Sis, why are you crying?

Sis, who's that lady?
Sis, why is she shouting at daddy?
Sis, why is he walking away?
Sis, why are you angry?

We've been waiting for hours, Sis
What's going to happen now?
Is daddy coming back?
Sis, don't cry, he'll come back somehow

Sis why is the lady here?
Sis where are you going?
Why can't I come, sis?
Sis why are we crying?

Sis, where are you?
Please come back for me
I'm scared, so scared
Please don't let me be

Sis, the lady's back
Sis, where is she taking me?
Is she taking me to you?
Sis, why am I going to Tennessee?

No let me go!
Sis, let me come with you!
Sis, why are you walking away!
Please! I want to come too!

Sis, why did you slam the door?
Sis, what did we do wrong?
Why daddy never came?
Were we never strong?

Sis, where's mommy then?
Sis, why are the people crying?
Sis, they're taking me away
Sis, where are you leaving?

Sis, you sent me an email
I missed you, three years has passed
I asked you where's mommy long ago
And now you're telling me, she never lasts

Sis, is this where mommy lives?
Sis why is there a big flat stone?
Sis, where is she now?
Sis, where's the truth you never shown?

Oh, now I see
What you're trying to say
Three years ago
That was her last day
It was daddy's fault
That's why he walked away

(This is for a friend I wrote. He told me this story and now I'm telling it to you. Please note: keep all your families together. Nothing is important than family.)

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  • 17 years ago

    by Debbie

    Kris,

    I took pleasure in reading this piece. I can see that the repetition wasn't as proficiently done as the idea and tone of voice employed, whereas the overall development was pretty well-organized until the finale. The beginning was much compelling than the ending, though. Still... I liked it on the basis of the poet's insight of the circumstance. All the best. :]

    Take care,
    Marian

  • 17 years ago

    by JaMeS

    So totally sad written with great emotion well done

    but im some what confused as to the lady? it sounded like the main character was being put into care? if you could pm me id be grateful...

  • 17 years ago

    by disturbed one

    Ooh i loved it...at first i was thinking...i think this is about the halocaust but the sisters seperated so that cant be...so then i realized what it was about and it was awesome =D

    10/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I found this story to be interesting, Although the repetition was a little too much in some places and not as effective. The emotions were strong though and portrayed nicely. The ending quite interesting. A well written story. Quite an enjoyable read. Well done with this~mel

  • 17 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    Some of the repetition wasn't as effective as it could've been. I do like the emotional aspect and appeal though. I might not like the repetition and some of the words but considering view point it actually fits to add to the emotions. An interesting ending.
    ~TETNL

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