4 seasons

Thank you for your comments and knid words!!! I wrote this when i was 17 and forgot a wrote it!!! I am 25 now , so it was good finding them, and i will take your idaes and use them in the future. And critisms , as long as constructive are welcome

I read your poem and found it quite an easy read and a pleasant piece. Keep up the good words. May the ebb and flow of your thoughts and emotions find a good spot to call home.

An effectively written piece. Your use of imagery, repetition and free flowing rhyme helps engage the reader and bring forth the message very well. If anywhere this poem requires tweaking, I would only suggest the following two:

It is not always necessary to have a rhyme in each stanza if that's the base of the poem - it can work just as effectively with a free-flow, as you have somewhat demonstrated. So, in the first stanza, you could change the final line from "The love of you" to "Your love". It may seem slightly more abrupt, but its sharpness makes it a lot more 'to the point', if you know my meaning.

Second of all, you should place a comma in the second stanza so it reads "Softly, slowly, to the ground". Also, while at this stanza, you could shorten the third line from "the autumn seems so incomplete" - "This auburn month seems incomplete" (just makes it visually appealing for the reader).

I hope you don’t take my criticism in the wrong tone – I only advise because I see hidden talent in many new people and want to make them aware of where it lies.
Other than that, a well written piece (especially considering that you are new here). Keep writing and well done :)