Nooo thats so sad, it is well written though hope your ok xxxxx

Interesting. I liked what you did with this poem you began to portray it quite nicely. The topic seemed some what cliche in it but thats only because I've read so many poems like this and wrote alot myself. I liked the style. Good work on this~mel

One typo-- in the last line 'to' should be too'. You seem to have a knack for writing short, yet extremely descriptive poems that are enjoyable to read.

Oh, and a comment on the type of rhyme scheme you've used--- this is a relatively tough one to follow, and it definitely works well here. Nice job!

Wow, this poem is very deep. i like it very much. lots of emotioin comes from ur writtin. keep it up 5/5

This is also a good poem and its crazy...i love you tell us that the floor got all bloody but in different words i dont know but this poem is really good!

Very beautifully worded and proper lexis used. I love reading sad poems. This one is also great. I really worth your work, just correct the meager mistake "to/too".

Yet it is 5/5 from me :)

With love
Fsams