Why i left

This is what i mean i love it, over all perfect even the flow were so smooth and the mixture of different emotions were great!! Keep it up

I like this because its made me realise and think a lot about someone in my life, i like how you have expressed about not stopped loving him even though he has hurt you. again, i think your talent is very good xxxxxxxxx

To me there are two ways to write one to the general public and the other to a privite party. I feel with out knowing the history of the person you are writing this poem too the general reader gets lost. Not saying this is bad it just different in the type of audience your writing for. Just a thought Plot121

Your first stanza?
Very raw emotions.

i left because [[you're]] complicated
[[your're]] 19[[,]] have a kid[[,]] and her mum
but you still made time for me
i miss you so much

You should collaborate more on the whole
Complicated one.
It's not very discriptive.

I would do anything to wake up next to you
That's a really strong sentence.
It kind of contradicts with your other sentences, though.
If you say "I'd do anything"
It usually means.. well you'd do anything.

i [[wounder]] why i ever left
It's wonder, dear.

Hmm..
Your ending was pretty great.
But I didn't really like your poem that much.
It was confusing.
Not the good confusing that makes you wonder.
The confusing that makes you befuddled.
4/5, dear.

This was a beautifully written poem and it was interesting to read... You got talent and I hope to read more of your work... I like the emotion that you put into it and how I know that some people can relate to this... Keep up the good work... :)