by Dee Jun 4, 2007
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
I was born in '88 Broken Hill, Australia |
Thats realy good and great flow i feel bad that u got kicked out if i got kicked pout i would have no where to go so ur lucky |
by Baby Rainbow
Awww wow, thats really good. sounds like you have had a lot to deal with and i admire you a lot and im glad i have read your writing and will continue to do so. im glad you settled down at last you seem like a very strong and very talented person xxxxxxxxxx |
by Robert
Out of all the poems I have read of yours this seems to be your best in message and form I enjoyed this alot and the story line was well done congrads greaat job Plot121 |
by Melpomene
This poem was amazing, It had me interested from the very straight expecially since I read "broken Hill" seeing as I live in australia I knew where that is. This poem held an emotional story which was portrayed beautifully with a sweet eneding. I liked the structure of the two line stanzas it made this poem look neat and effective. The ryhme was good and the flow flawless. Well done on an exceptional poem~mel |
This was a very strong emotional poem, yet very to the point. I loved the rhythm and flow of it all. Every line was really well written. I loved how there was so much pain in one poem and then in the end you were able to bring it together to create a happy ending, and one that actually hits you and makes you think wow...! Good job and keep up the amazing work |