Oh.
Creative!
I like!
Haha. You're short poetry makes me smile.

Now.
It's more of a prose that you have going here, but I'll give it to you. It was very powerful; it makes you think and that's what poetry should really do.

I wasn't <beautifully> penned since it was more of a prose, but d-a-m-n-i-t it had a lot of meaning and sometimes that's the best [usually] part.

Nicely done.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

I will give you a 4/5, because the message was strong but the format was not the best. Keep working at it for you could go very far.

Very very very good these poems are getting a bit longer i think but they need to be LONGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG lol 5/5