Honestly to me this poem was really intense. Yes from the first stanza I picked up what this poem was about but indeed it was a thrilling poem which kept me in interest to find out what was following a man throughout darkness. Your ryhme shceme was flawless I think you picked the right words for this dark poem and held it together nicely. This was truely an intriguing piece of poetry which I found to hold a very dark glow over the entire piece. Well done on writing such a horror packed stunning poem. ~mel

OH WOW! that was scary! lol no seriously, it was quite like a story first and the tension build up was awesome! then i finally realised they were a GREAT use of metaphors! [well i think they were right ? =] its a wicked poem, im loving it!
once again sorry for late comment! xx

Very good poem strong passion was felt keep it up

laura

I loved the detail in this poem. How mysteries and dark it was. Very nicely done. You would do well writing a stories and such with your detail. :)

You're an excellent writer... this was amazing! ooh, such a dark poem, the flow was flawless... and your word choice is crazy good!
great job!

Sandra

WOW!!
i cant stop readin your poem they are amazin

The structure seems to be the same as the poem I just read before, though it's a completley different poem. This is defintley dark, written well also. I did like the other one a little better though. nice read. 5/5 nonetheless

marcella

One of your better ones 5/5

Dark..I like!

Good poem

Loved it. Very much so, all except for one word: "Whine" doesn't seem to fit well at all with the rest of the poem. That's the only criticism I have; other than that I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. Thanks for sharing!

Haunting and chilling...a splendid read. VEry spooky....I love the imagery and the feelings of fear... Great job on this! I'll give this a 5/5!!!! Keep writing!

Wow it gave me the chills it makes you not want to walk at night scary

kiwi

wanna read mine tell me what you think