In Those Pictures

Great poem! i loved it, it was goood as! i rate it 5/5 =] =]

I also liked the lines

Though the memories are sweet,
Covered in plastic; deceit
The story is incomplete...
In those pictures

i also liked how you repeated the lines in those pictures because it really reinforced your message.

i think you did well in capturing your idea and message. well done

Great poem! Good use of imagery and the rhyming was spot on. Uniquely done in the seventh stanza. The fifth stanza was amazingly written. You are turning out to be rather good at using repetition without over doing it. The only thing I think you should correct is in line six where you should've used "doesn't lie" instead. Besides one minor grammatic error this poem was absolutely amazing.

It was very good at the meaning is put together very well but like the first stanzas i wasn't really into it but as i kept reading i got pulled in great job keep writing
-laura-

This was a really good poem i loved it
Carly