"What [cam] first?" - came.

Such a backward viewpoint, eh. It was quite thoughtful on the whole, whereas the need for punctuations is rendered necessary to enhance its flow. A good effort, nonetheless

Okay. I fixed the typo, and I added puctuation. compared to most poems on this site (all of the ones about suicide, cutting, and other tragic/negative things) this poem was downright optomistic. yeah, it's not gonna win Best Attitude. o well.

Ps - you were right about punctuation. I think it actually helped the poem a lot :)

It is strong in message...but i do not think it is your best. The flow is not very strong nor is the word choice. I think you could do much better. Try and put more into it and work on it more. I love the message, but the poem needs work. I believe that it could be wonderful if it got some work put in to it though. Good luck and tell me if you decide to add to it or not! I can give you a 3/5 for now.

-Sabree