by Startle Me Jun 5, 2007
category :
Life, society /
other
The woman looks at the men flirtatiously; |
Good poem... tells a good story |
Some of the grammar ws off, but I like how you started by describing her and then going into her "job", and you could tell what it is even though you didn't come right out and say it. Great job. |
Sit and stare= sits and stares |
It's funny how we sometimes look at people and assume we know a little if not most about them judging by the way they look/dress. I loved the poem and the topic was very unique, flow was pretty good and it ended strong - nicely done 5/5 |
by Tammie
Wow, this is quite an interesting poem. I wasn't expecting the twist at the end at all. Your description created beautiful imagery, and the flow was really good. It did get a bit rough at the end, but it was only minor. Well done at this unique piece. |