by .K.i.T.t.Y.
Wow. that took an intersting turn. this was not at all what i pictured this poem from the title. good job. you captured a different topic. i like the wording in your poems, though there are a few areas where words stubble or gap. good job. 4/5. |
Amazingly written...i didnt realize till you said the word "sell" that she was a prostitute..you made her sound asoundinly beautiful and proved a point that shes still the same person and that she doesnt do it cause she likes it but cause she has no other choice since its too late..i thought it was very good...5/5 |
by Robert
This was a good poem up to a point the last section was abit rough to say the most part I liked it but the flow was off it seems you didn't go from saintly woeman to harlet so well I think with a bit of revision you may find a more smooth transition Plot121 |
by Tammie
Wow, this is quite an interesting poem. I wasn't expecting the twist at the end at all. Your description created beautiful imagery, and the flow was really good. It did get a bit rough at the end, but it was only minor. Well done at this unique piece. |
It's funny how we sometimes look at people and assume we know a little if not most about them judging by the way they look/dress. I loved the poem and the topic was very unique, flow was pretty good and it ended strong - nicely done 5/5 |
Sit and stare= sits and stares |
Some of the grammar ws off, but I like how you started by describing her and then going into her "job", and you could tell what it is even though you didn't come right out and say it. Great job. |
Good poem... tells a good story |