Good message great flow i like this one alot
5/5
laura

Loved the comparisons :-)
your use of words is simply irresistible..
now, don't get offended but I must ask-how come your English is so good even though you're not a native speaker??

Bravo again!

That is really good, I love your ending it is really good, but why does everything lead to death? I don't understand....surely there is something else....
Nice work
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That was a very powerful piece of writing! I'm very impressed! *Claps* You're thoughts are very well organized and I loved how the poem progressed instead of stalling. Your describing of certain key thoughts are very well done, and I can tell that your mind is one that's deeper than what is seen. Keep writing and Great job!!! :)