I think I've read something like this. Anyways it was good but I think if you fix it up a bit it'd be better. Theres some lines that you forgot to put them like this one:

"what the hell '' thought"

This should've been written up like: "what the hell" he thought...

I also think if you re-word a couple of words it'd be a lot better, maybe put it into stanzas too? I dont know, just my opinion. Keep it up!

Hey,
its just a sad story, in one of the last lines you write when he parents found out, I think you meant his parents, furthermore I think that the flow is a but off, so I give you 4/5..
kisses stephanie