Don't Hurt Me With Your Paperclipped Lies

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Jun 6, 2007


Reprimand me for your mistakes; you've got a lot to learn from,
Let me toy with your mind, let me manipulate <you> some.
You've got a lot to learn from, these mistakes that you continue to make,
But we'll peel off your appearance from the outside and make you ache.

Grab your cliches and stuff them into your head; maybe they'll help you sleep,
You've got a lot to learn from, but even more that you need to find and keep.
I once was your solace, but now I'll be the monster under your bed;
You've got nothing to save you now, because you don't have friends to tread.

You'll hold my voice high in your head, yet curse at me with the slightest hint,
You've got nothing left; I"m the one laughing at the path you went.
I can take the secret, you don't want me around, or maybe you do,
But I could careless about your cliche tears and anything about you.

So stuff those cliche tears back into your head;
If you hold onto me all I will promise is to be the monster under your bed.
You can whimper and lose your shine, but not even god could save you;
What you need is a date with the devil and a new type of glue.

We've got a lot to work on, but I just may not hang around;
There's so much to find out and discover without you pushing me to the ground.
Your glue has gone stale and I promise I won't come back,
Because you're precious angel had a date with the devil and got some tact.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    I really, really liked this one.
    "Monster under your bed" < baha. that made me smile, big.

    "because you don't have friends" << that seems a bit off to me. Idk why, it through me off, a lot.

    Other than that AMAZING and perfect poemm. :]
    keep it uppp.

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Pffft. Can't believe you don't like this, lol. Your imagery was great as always, as well as your word choice. I did notice a few things, though...

    "But I could careless about your cliche tears and anything about you."

    ^^ 'careless' should be 'care less'.

    Other than that, there was a capitalization one I noticed for 'God' lol, but anyways, enough nagging. This was a really good poem, I loved the title as well.

    :]
    5.5
    <3

  • 17 years ago

    by Georgi

    Hey again babe!
    I thought i'd read another one cause i did really like your last one.
    Initially i thought this was odd because of the flow and how it isnt really fixed. BUT after id read it i actually loved it. It sounded like you were telling a story, like teaching someone a serious life lesson, or lecturing someone, giving them the best advice life can offer in a story like form, and still rhyming the end of your sentences, no matter the length. I thought that was really effective.
    I loved this line
    "But we'll peel off your appearance from the outside and make you ache" especially cause of the words you used, "peel" - and the context you used it in "peel off your appearance" thats so original and unique and fitted really well!
    was just wondering, maybe the last line would sound better without the "beacause"? i dont know actually, cant quite work it out. But yeah just somthing for u to think about cause i hate one liner comments!! lol
    WELL DONE =] I gave it a 5.
    keep it up
    take care
    Geo
    xoxoxoxxo

  • 17 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    WOW that was good, depressing, descriptive, very unique and i mean wow 6/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

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