WOW that was good, depressing, descriptive, very unique and i mean wow 6/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

Hey again babe!
I thought i'd read another one cause i did really like your last one.
Initially i thought this was odd because of the flow and how it isnt really fixed. BUT after id read it i actually loved it. It sounded like you were telling a story, like teaching someone a serious life lesson, or lecturing someone, giving them the best advice life can offer in a story like form, and still rhyming the end of your sentences, no matter the length. I thought that was really effective.
I loved this line
"But we'll peel off your appearance from the outside and make you ache" especially cause of the words you used, "peel" - and the context you used it in "peel off your appearance" thats so original and unique and fitted really well!
was just wondering, maybe the last line would sound better without the "beacause"? i dont know actually, cant quite work it out. But yeah just somthing for u to think about cause i hate one liner comments!! lol
WELL DONE =] I gave it a 5.
keep it up
take care
Geo
xoxoxoxxo

Pffft. Can't believe you don't like this, lol. Your imagery was great as always, as well as your word choice. I did notice a few things, though...

"But I could careless about your cliche tears and anything about you."

^^ 'careless' should be 'care less'.

Other than that, there was a capitalization one I noticed for 'God' lol, but anyways, enough nagging. This was a really good poem, I loved the title as well.

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5.5
<3

I really, really liked this one.
"Monster under your bed" < baha. that made me smile, big.

"because you don't have friends" << that seems a bit off to me. Idk why, it through me off, a lot.

Other than that AMAZING and perfect poemm. :]
keep it uppp.