by Vanessa
I think you over used to the word heart it puts the readers off a little bit, and the word true love was a little over used too, try coming up with diffrent words that have the same meaning. And this would be one of the best, It is good, but I know that you can do better. Great choice of emtion, and excellent word choice, |
by NearlyCrazy6
Yea, same as vanessa |