I liked it. It was different and interesting. It also had nice word choice. But the flow was a little off. I gave it a 5/5.

Diffrent yet intriguging, really well written, the word choice is simple yet effective. the emtion was clear, and strong, the flow was a little off in some places, but I still give it 5/5 Try reading the poem outloud to yourself and you might be able to fix the flow with adding or removing one or two words. Keep up the good work

Effective poem with really good words choice.
It reveals your emotions with a great metaphor.
5/5

This was different but effective. I liked your word choice used it was deep powerful and held such strong emotions. This was an amazingly written poem which I think you wrote amazingly. Well done another good one from you~mel