Great poem by javon

I like this poem alot.. especially the structure of the whole thing.. its very familiar.. lol :D hehe i love you.. and i LOVE the last line its amazing.. but i think that you should word it differently .. i dont know it sounds weird well not weird.. it just .. idk whatever.. :D

This poem is fantastic and the imagery throughout is amazing, I could picture everyline in my head so clearly. I loved how you talked about the dream in the poem relating to life and how it can sometimes be so empty. Amazing poem 5/5

This piece was rather nicely written and worthy of note. It further kept me interested until the concluding line--I think it lacks a coherent ending. I, nevertheless, never failed to enjoy reading this thoughtful piece about Life. The metaphors, on the whole, are very conducive to the poem's presentation.

Nice work, nonetheless. 'twas quite pleasurable to read. All the best and take care. ~Debbie

Hey,
I really liked the description in your poem, the language you used was good. All of the different descriptions of how you see and understand the dream, it was detailed and flowed nicely.
I have a suggestion though, i like your style of writing and i think it, especially in this poem, would be really effective if you used an abab rhyme scheme, it would perfect the flow, but i think it works well either way, it was just a suggestion =]
Take care
Geo
xoxoxox

Hi dear,
I liked teh concept in this materpiece,so powerful words and great explanations it includes..That'S what it made it that awesome..and I would like suggest some things If you would like help

First..It would be best if you capitalize the begining letters on each lines

Second...its=It's

Other than that
You did an amazing job
Keep it up,
Laura